Hell’s fury appears in both the flesh and the unseen realm, where trust is blurred, and deception is a matter of life or death. For fans of novels by Frank Peretti and Colleen Coble
This pulled me in right away…the atmosphere is really strong, and the sensory detail makes the fear feel very real. I especially liked how physical everything felt….the smells, the textures, the way the shadow moves.
I did notice toward the end my attention drifted slightly, and I think it’s just because there’s so much imagery layered together that it gets a little hard to track. I found myself wanting a bit more grounding there to stay fully connected.
But overall, really compelling opening. It definitely holds tension well.
I feel this so much…tightening is honestly one of my biggest struggles too 😅
It’s such a weird balance between making it immersive and not over-layering it. Yours is strong though the atmosphere is definitely there. It might just be a matter of choosing which details carry the moment.
Going in for Episode 2
Yay! A time jump happens this Thursday, with my main character as an adult.
Scary 👻 Floating in the bed? Soulless leaden Monster. 🍿
Loved this! Will be pursuing this read!
Thanks for the read and encouragement!
Of course 🫶
I'm definitely reading more!
Thanks! Always an honor to have someone read. 😊
This pulled me in right away…the atmosphere is really strong, and the sensory detail makes the fear feel very real. I especially liked how physical everything felt….the smells, the textures, the way the shadow moves.
I did notice toward the end my attention drifted slightly, and I think it’s just because there’s so much imagery layered together that it gets a little hard to track. I found myself wanting a bit more grounding there to stay fully connected.
But overall, really compelling opening. It definitely holds tension well.
Thanks for the feedback! I write without the sensory always being a priority and then tighten it up when editing, perhaps too much. 🤪
I feel this so much…tightening is honestly one of my biggest struggles too 😅
It’s such a weird balance between making it immersive and not over-layering it. Yours is strong though the atmosphere is definitely there. It might just be a matter of choosing which details carry the moment.